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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby Lor » Tue Apr 02, 2013 11:17 pm

Yay, an update
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby Cnor » Thu Apr 25, 2013 7:55 pm

Bottom of page 1, last paragraph of chapter 3:

The outer walls of melanin crumbled in several spots.


Pretty sure that should be Milanin, unless you meant for them to be made from skin pigment...
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Fri Apr 26, 2013 3:00 pm

Cnor wrote:Bottom of page 1, last paragraph of chapter 3:

The outer walls of melanin crumbled in several spots.


Pretty sure that should be Milanin, unless you meant for them to be made from skin pigment...


fixed, thanks for spotting it.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Mon Apr 29, 2013 1:36 pm

So, how many people would be pissed if i threw a "the end" up at the end of that post?


The story will continue, whether Regus lives or dies is in the hand of Fate. Let us hope Delphine is watching.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby Lor » Wed May 08, 2013 11:57 pm

I think I would have been.

Before the grand reveal about the crown and the previous empire, I started wondering if the crown was truly real, or if our hero just wanted it and unconsciously willed it to be so.

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Now I'm just wondering where Anex was in the previous incarnation.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Thu May 09, 2013 4:44 pm

Since they are star crossed lovers, I imagine she was somewhere where the stars crossed.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby WhirdCheese » Fri May 10, 2013 12:31 am

So one of the deletamancers most likely.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Sat Jun 01, 2013 9:23 pm

Update is coming in a couple days. I am trying to get the new city description to feel right.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Sun Jun 30, 2013 12:50 am

Just noticed something very odd...my views on Prehendo Victorio have shot up from about 7k to 16k in the course of a month...which is insane, especially considering I had more views on this comment thread than the actual story for a very long time. Wonder what is going on...
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby Lor » Sun Jul 14, 2013 10:22 pm

I hope not all 8k are from me re-reading it.

From just a formatting view, liking the bolded dialogue. It helps readability.

Just goes without saying (even though I will say it) that enjoying the story as well.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Mon Jul 15, 2013 3:33 pm

I'm working up another post now, and am not sure if I will have something together to post today or not.

Also, while not erfy, I have a scifi story I'm putting together on my blog. First page is linked here

*UPDATE*

I have wanted to do this reveal for a while. I hope everyone enjoys Icevale's first caster
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby WhirdCheese » Mon Jul 15, 2013 8:05 pm

Well played sir... Well played. :mrgreen:
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby WaterMonkey314 » Mon Jul 15, 2013 9:25 pm

WhirdCheese wrote:Well played sir... Well played. :mrgreen:


Bravo!

Why has this not happened until now?
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Mon Jul 15, 2013 11:26 pm

I did make at least one other direct Doctor Who reference.

and he has appeared in till now because a Time Lord is never late, he appears precisely when he means to
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby WaterMonkey314 » Mon Jul 29, 2013 11:58 pm

Please tell me that wasn't a pun at the end... :|
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Wed Jul 31, 2013 1:04 am

WaterMonkey314 wrote:Please tell me that wasn't a pun at the end... :|


Theres probably more than one pun in there
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby Lor » Mon Oct 21, 2013 12:02 am

I don't have any specific comments at the moment, but would like to express my appreciation for more updates -- which apparently I just did.

Thanks!
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby tigerusthegreat » Mon Oct 21, 2013 12:53 am

Lor wrote:I don't have any specific comments at the moment, but would like to express my appreciation for more updates -- which apparently I just did.

Thanks!



Glad to be appreciated. I've struggled for a bit with how I should handle the conflicts between my story's rules and the canon rules. I decided to just go with how I think they should work. It won't matter in the end anyway, as this is just an alternate story set in a similar world.
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby zeuspro » Mon Apr 14, 2014 9:40 am

Yay for updates :)
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Re: Comments for Prehendo Victoria

Postby BrimStone » Wed Apr 23, 2014 11:48 am

It is a fun read, I am enjoying the vision, great job!
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