Comments on "A Mind Broken"

[Stryke]

Comments, questions, suggestions or just some good old fashioned grammer naziing

I'm sure you all know how it works by now

[Stryke]

Ok lets try this again, despite lifes best efforts i have finally managed to get an update done. I'd appreciate any help on grammer and any Stupid-world terms that need translated etc. I've tried to get most of the emo stuff into this update so following updates will include substantially less of that. Plus i want to see if my refrences are as blatantly obvious as i think they are.

[tigerusthegreat]

WW2 references for the win?

[Stryke]

would it have been as painfully obvious if i hadn't used the name Montgomery

[tigerusthegreat]

would it have been as painfully obvious if i hadn't used the name Montgomery

Until I saw Montgomery, I glossed over Aryan, but I would have picked up on it with the side of Al-Eye. Good job overall, it's interesting.