Comments on "People Magic"

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Comments on "People Magic"

Postby Welf von Ehrwald » Thu Jan 06, 2011 9:03 am

So, this is it, my first fanfic in years. It's an idea I had some days ago and I wrote it down before I think too much about it and lose interest. Feel free to criticize as much as you want. Actually I ask you to do it. If I don't know what I did wrong I can't improve. Criticize everything, from the word choice and grammar to the idea and characterization.
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Re: Comments on "People Magic"

Postby Sieggy » Thu Jan 06, 2011 5:55 pm

Good beginning, though it could use some editing. (not being picky - pretty much everything requires editing . . .) I'm looking forward to the next installment!
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Re: Comments on "People Magic"

Postby youngstormlord » Sun Jan 09, 2011 1:17 pm

How important can one caster be :lol: Awesome start, can't wait to read the rest! Keep it coming!
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Re: Comments on "People Magic"

Postby Welf von Ehrwald » Mon Jan 10, 2011 2:49 pm

Thank you, praise helps writing :)
I'm working on the next part, and the story is coming together. And I guess you have to read some more to find out why they want that caster. ;)
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Re: Comments on "People Magic"

Postby youngstormlord » Tue Jan 11, 2011 2:53 pm

Welf von Ehrwald wrote:Thank you, praise helps writing :)
I'm working on the next part, and the story is coming together. And I guess you have to read some more to find out why they want that caster. ;)


Oh, I have read enough :). Dessert + Florist = Jungle. I was just laughing because no one had thought to write the story about it before. ;) I mean, I've read one line "Healomancy scrolls are harder to come by now." and wrote a fanfiction... You wrote something completely original!
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