Comments for Prehendo Victoria

[tigerusthegreat]

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[WaterMonkey314]

Quite interesting - I'd love to see you continue this! (I particularly love the "twit"s and whatnot )

Though... is King Sixtus the Seventh's twusername supposed to be KingSixtheFive?

[tigerusthegreat]

Quite interesting - I'd love to see you continue this! (I particularly love the "twit"s and whatnot )

Though... is King Sixtus the Seventh's twusername supposed to be KingSixtheFive?

Eh....because...of reasons you don't know.

Its a typo. The writer in me wants to fix it but the DM in me wants to use the oddity as a future plot point.


I'll just fix it. Good catch. It stemmed from the fact I was going to call him sixtus the fifth, after the pope with the same funny name, but decided to change it to be less obvious.

[cloudbreaker]

I think I'm as eager as Anex to find out what that Foolamancy thing was.

[Stryke]

I like it and am looking forward to see where you go with this.

[Stryke]

I DEMAND AN UPDATE

[tigerusthegreat]

I DEMAND AN UPDATE

Hope this is good enough to make up for the wait.

[WaterMonkey314]

I DEMAND AN UPDATE

Hope this is good enough to make up for the wait.

This is full of win. Huzzah for more Prehendo Victoria!!!

[tigerusthegreat]

I DEMAND AN UPDATE

Hope this is good enough to make up for the wait.

This is full of win. Huzzah for more Prehendo Victoria!!!

Significantly better than the boo/hiss I expected for the semi-cliche romantic twist.

[skarl]

update, update, give me an update, for I am terribly bored by reading it agian... the last ten times where great, but the eleven't time...

[tigerusthegreat]

You can't rush art!

but you can rush Art, though he prefers Arthur...

at any rate, I'll try to get updates going regularly...I'd hate for you to have to read it twelve more times

Updated...now quit your whining :-p

[tigerusthegreat]

Double updates? And half the fat?

Now with "I can't believe its not Shakespeare....spray!"

[WaterMonkey314]

Another awesome - oh wait - another TWO awesome updates!

I love Hamratio already, even with just a couple of lines to his name!

[tigerusthegreat]

I sincerely apologize for butchering Shakespeare....but it didn't quite fit in a world where there is no tomorrow, only next turn. And I so love that bit of Macbeth.

[WaterMonkey314]

Holy boop, ANOTHER update?!

Too much awesome! And I can't imagine how you've managed to write all those verses so quickly!

[skarl]

[/whining]

absolutely great!

[tigerusthegreat]

I was able to do it quickly because it is fauxetry. The lines are mismatched, occasionally rhyme and syllables are not iambic nor pentameter all the time. The ones that are are probably stolen wholesale from mr shakespeare himself.

Its kinda like a spackled wall to cover a hole. Unless you look closely it seems good, but the spackler knows it is there.

[skarl]

nice update, but I think that you'd like to rewrite the last sentence; it's kinda awkward to me.

[tigerusthegreat]

nice update, but I think that you'd like to rewrite the last sentence; it's kinda awkward to me.

Truncated it to just the first part, I think it gets the point across.

[skarl]

She threw her arms around him, and kissed her. Time seemed to stand still...

er... just had it at dutch... don't know what it is called in english, but I'll give it a try:

after the comma, you have a subclause, witch hasn't all the words in it. the (subject/topic/object/theme/subject-matter, don't know wich one is the right translation) in the first part of the sentence is 'She'. in a good subclause, you may or may not repeat it. you decided not to. if you had, this would be the sentence:

She threw her arms around him, and she kissed her

the sentence is about Regus and his chief warlord kissing. I always understood Regus as being MALE. I don't know if you meant Regus by SHE or her, but if Regus is male, than he would certainly be a he or a him, and not a she or a her.